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Old 09-03-2008, 05:55 PM   #1
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Okay, I just wrote this one not too long ago.


Dear Dad.
Sitting here in my tears, waiting and wishing for you to come back.
Contemplating about my fears, wondering if I’m on the right track.
I wanted to follow in your footsteps, I wanted you to be my hero.
I found out I wasn’t on the right path, you turned out to be a zero.
You’re the last person here that I ever need, I’m independent and strong.
It’s great now that I see, I trust myself to never go wrong.
There was a point where I didn’t think I’d be that way, that I needed your leadership to guide me.
You were never there anyway, you’re the last person I want to be.
I’m not the crying girl, I grew up without you at home.
I’ll thank you for one thing, you taught me how to be alone.
Everything you missed is in our past, hopefully you’ll one day regret.
You’re days aren’t going to last, maybe one day we’ve met.
Until that day, I’m going to live my life to the best I can possibly be.
I’m going to be better than you in every way, that I hope to see.



Just thought I'd write that to understand me better.
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Old 09-09-2008, 04:48 PM   #2
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wow thats deep hun..

I loved it nice to see some work from you..

sorry it took so long to see and respond to this...


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YOu have some real talent..
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Old 09-09-2008, 05:27 PM   #3
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wow thats deep hun..

I loved it nice to see some work from you..

sorry it took so long to see and respond to this...


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YOu have some real talent..
Thank you very much Danzer.

It didn't take me long to write it actually, I know I gotten better throughout the years of practice. I don't know when I should write my next one, hopefully soon! I hope I get to see more from you as well, you do a wonderful job also.

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never knew you cried

its a nice poem
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never knew you cried

its a nice poem
Behind the attitude, behind my stubborn or spunkyness there's a sensitive side of me, also a huge romantic at heart and kid at heart. So yeah I cry... won't admit it much though.

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Behind the attitude, behind my stubborn or spunkyness there's a sensitive side of me, also a huge romantic at heart and kid at heart. So yeah I cry... won't admit it much though.

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i knew that since your first post kinda my hidden talent....
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i knew that since your first post kinda my hidden talent....
what is that hidden talent? Oh noes a spy!!!!!!!
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