Untitled (check this out)

vshayes · 06-21-2008, 10:04 AM

Untitled

by: Gabby Irvin

Here I sit,
Alone in the cold dark room.
Wishing someone would come.
I scearm and cry,
Still nobody hears or comes.
I finally die,
After the cold, dark world took my life.

Copyright ©2008 Gabby Irvin

This is my nieces Poem.. EVERY ONE.. If u think its good... click the link below and vote!!! She is only 12 years old and very good at this.. She has already won several of these competitions.

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Dana · 06-21-2008, 10:21 AM

Not bad I like It I gave it a 10. Reminds me of my old work.

teh_fuzz · 06-21-2008, 10:24 AM

done!
very nice work from your niece!

SYN · 06-21-2008, 10:26 AM

short and strong... nice

Mase · 06-21-2008, 10:32 AM

Sounds nice.

COOL_BREEZE2 · 06-21-2008, 11:15 AM

Voted. 10/10.

Very good.

Mrs Behavin · 06-21-2008, 11:19 AM

Very good for her age! I hope she knows how talented she is!

skyblue · 06-21-2008, 08:51 PM

i voted 10/10.......it actually is good

dazner · 09-09-2008, 04:51 PM

Very good for her age as i've heard someone already said but this isn't how she feels hopefully...

most poetry this good comes from true emotion...

but either way very good I gave her a 10...

vshayes · 09-09-2008, 05:20 PM

SHe is very emo.. Unfortunately, she has gone through some bad things.. she has already been a cutter, but has gotten help.. We dont know why she is this way, she has never had anything bad happen to her other than school mates teasing her.

dazner · 09-09-2008, 05:37 PM

poetry does help to release a bit and it sounds like she's great at it.....

maybe she just needs to keep writing....

wish her goodluck for me will ya V.....

she's got a bright future with such a hidden talent...

06-21-2008, 10:04 AM	#1
vshayes Boss Administrator Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Warner Robins, GA Posts: 19,658 Tokenz: 230,723	Untitled (check this out) Untitled by: Gabby Irvin Here I sit, Alone in the cold dark room. Wishing someone would come. I scearm and cry, Still nobody hears or comes. I finally die, After the cold, dark world took my life. Copyright ©2008 Gabby Irvin This is my nieces Poem.. EVERY ONE.. If u think its good... click the link below and vote!!! She is only 12 years old and very good at this.. She has already won several of these competitions. Rate Poetry Rate My Poem Voting Poems __________________ What I Wish For You My Sons What I wish for you today and every day there after, I wish for you the joys of life to come, I wish for you that the life you lead may be praised by God for now and always, I wish for you the knowledge to face life as it comes, I wish for you hope and wisdom that I have instilled in you to know the difference between right and wrong, I wish for you all the dreams and hope that you could ever imagine, I wish for you love for everlasting life.

06-21-2008, 10:21 AM	#2
Dana Member Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Winslow, ME Posts: 8,257 Tokenz: 31,031	Re: Untitled (check this out) Not bad I like It I gave it a 10. Reminds me of my old work. __________________ The road through life is rough... Buy a helmet!

06-21-2008, 10:24 AM	#3
teh_fuzz Want a mushroom stamp??? Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: Houston, Texas Posts: 2,832 Tokenz: 35,055	Re: Untitled (check this out) done! very nice work from your niece! __________________ FoxMulder In Disguise

06-21-2008, 10:26 AM	#4
SYN Banned PER user's request Join Date: May 2008 Posts: 4,865 Tokenz: 960	Re: Untitled (check this out) short and strong... nice

06-21-2008, 10:32 AM	#5
Mase Mason Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Sydney, Australia. Posts: 4,019 Tokenz: 2,081	Re: Untitled (check this out) Sounds nice. __________________ General Forum - Other Forum I frequent Facebook - My facebook. Add me if you want

06-21-2008, 11:15 AM	#6
COOL_BREEZE2 aka CB Join Date: Sep 2007 Posts: 11,313 Tokenz: 643	Re: Untitled (check this out) Voted. 10/10. Very good. __________________ Yeah, there always after my lucky charms. What? Why does every one always laugh when I say that. They are after me lucky charms. What?

06-21-2008, 11:19 AM	#7
Mrs Behavin Moderator Staff Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Hot Springs Arkansas Posts: 20,376 Tokenz: 10,803	Re: Untitled (check this out) Very good for her age! I hope she knows how talented she is! __________________ http://amyssweettoothrecipes.blogspot.com/ http://dumasgang.blogspot.com/

06-21-2008, 08:51 PM	#8
skyblue someone needs a life Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: in a depressed state Posts: 10,637 Tokenz: 51,895	Re: Untitled (check this out) i voted 10/10.......it actually is good __________________ $C:\Users\ian\Pictures\gp copy.jpg$ SHAKE YOUR MONEY MAKER BABY SMOKE IF YOU'VE GOT IT

09-09-2008, 04:51 PM	#9
dazner Who you'd like to be! Join Date: May 2008 Posts: 3,538 Tokenz: 4,372	Re: Untitled (check this out) Very good for her age as i've heard someone already said but this isn't how she feels hopefully... most poetry this good comes from true emotion... but either way very good I gave her a 10... __________________ Wanna Get Away? I'm a Rapper, Father and Husband which means a Poet, Leader and ATM

09-09-2008, 05:20 PM	#10
vshayes Boss Administrator Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Warner Robins, GA Posts: 19,658 Tokenz: 230,723	Re: Untitled (check this out) SHe is very emo.. Unfortunately, she has gone through some bad things.. she has already been a cutter, but has gotten help.. We dont know why she is this way, she has never had anything bad happen to her other than school mates teasing her. __________________ What I Wish For You My Sons What I wish for you today and every day there after, I wish for you the joys of life to come, I wish for you that the life you lead may be praised by God for now and always, I wish for you the knowledge to face life as it comes, I wish for you hope and wisdom that I have instilled in you to know the difference between right and wrong, I wish for you all the dreams and hope that you could ever imagine, I wish for you love for everlasting life.

09-09-2008, 05:37 PM	#11
dazner Who you'd like to be! Join Date: May 2008 Posts: 3,538 Tokenz: 4,372	Re: Untitled (check this out) poetry does help to release a bit and it sounds like she's great at it..... maybe she just needs to keep writing.... wish her goodluck for me will ya V..... she's got a bright future with such a hidden talent... __________________ Wanna Get Away? I'm a Rapper, Father and Husband which means a Poet, Leader and ATM

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